There is a scene in the movie, Amedeus, that has always stayed with me and fits this post.
JOSEPH: Well, Herr Mozart! A good effort. Decidedly that. An excellent effort! You've shown us something quite new today.
MOZART: It is new, it is, isn't it, Sire?
JOSEPH: Yes, indeed.
MOZART: And German?
JOSEPH: Oh, yes. Absolutely. German. Unquestionably!
MOZART: So then you like it? You really like it, Your Majesty?
JOSEPH: Of course I do. It's very good. Of course now and then - just now and then - it gets a touch elaborate.
MOZART: What do you mean, Sire?
JOSEPH: Well, I mean occasionally it seems to have, how shall one say (he stops in difficulty; to Orsini- Ronberg) How shall one say, Director?
ORSINI-ROSENBERG:
Too many notes, Your Majesty?
JOSEPH: Exactly. Very well put. Too many notes.
MOZART: I don't understand. There are just as many notes, Majesty, as are required. Neither more nor less.
JOSEPH: My dear fellow, there are in fact only so many notes the ear can hear in the course of an evening. I think I'm right in saying that, aren't I, Court Composer?
SALIERI: Yes! yes! er, on the whole, yes, Majesty
MOZART: (to Salieri) But this is absurd!
JOSEPH: My dear, young man, don't take it too hard. Your work is ingenious. It's quality work. And there are simply too many notes, that's all. Cut a few and it will be perfect.
MOZART: Which few did you have in mind, Majesty?
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Too many notes...when I first heard this I knew I would never forget it and I haven't!
During my doctorate program I was amazed by my fellow cohort members who could write in the academic style. The style that had a zillion words per sentence. The style that had terminology sprinkled throughout that made me have to reread a sentence many times to try to figure it out.
I always wondered why academic writing was so dense. I guess it's part of the hoops you have to jump to get that degree. I am ABD. I didn't jump through that hoop. I loved all the other hoops, though.
Today I came across this article, "
Cut the Clutter" at insidehighered.com. Too many words. Well, we do know that people simple will not read anything that has too many words. It just has to look like too many words and it will be ignored.
EmailsGet to the point. Use bullets. If people even think it's going to be too many words, they will either decide to read it later, which means never, or they delete it immediately.
Online anything Add white space. Add pictures. Write in chunks. And be succinct.
I believe there is more skill needed to write simply. Writing long sentences with "too many words" is not impressive. There are generational and professional aspects to academic writing. It depends on professors as to what constitutes rigor.
I think that people remember simple, easy writing that makes sense to them. Some remember all that other dense academic stuff and I think that's great for them. It's just not my style.